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The Assignment: Ad Analaysis

The letters seventeen in a vibrant orange color across the glossy cover of this teen fashion and advice magazine pretty much says it all. This magazine is geared towards teenage girls who love to shop, put on makeup, and stile their hair. On the glossy eye catching cover the pop singer Ashley Simpson is the cover girl and the headlines read, 閳ユ窂ack-to-School閳?閳ユ窏ot Hair Ideas閳?閳ユ窋ashion and Beauty Tricks閳?and 閳?10 Trends to Try Now.閳?Flipping through the magazine the models for the ads appear to be in their mid to late teens usually dressed in trendy hip cloths while advertising the newest face wash, fastest acting acne medication, or the latest lip gloss. The girls reading this magazine are living across America in their parents house sitting on their beads lessening to Beyonce閳? Justin Timberlake, or Fall Out Boy.

An ad for class rings simply says, 閳ユ珐ember Whatever Forever閳?in loud pink lettering. The main objects for this add are three class rings placed on a small background of lined writing paper. The main back ground shows snap shots of people scattered and overlapping across the page depicting good times with friends. One picture shows a couple in formal ware dancing at prom or homecoming while another random picture shows four girls in what appears to be a class room acting silly. Other random pictures are overlapping one another while the class rings are the main focus. The random placing of goofy and quirky snapshots triggers the readers own memories of high school and the random placing of the snapshots symbolizes the scattered flow of memories one receives when looking back into their own high school career. Both of these feelings will make the viewer want to purchase a class ring, because a class ring is a simble of high school and senior year.

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Your essay is quite good. In the first sentence change "seventeen" to "s-e-v-e-n-t-e-e-n". It works better as you refer to the individual letters. You could say, "The title 'seventeen' ", instead of "The letters seventeen" and it'd also be ok.

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This is a good essay! I don't think there should be any changes! good luck!

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A very good essay.

Check for spelling mistakes.

You have quite a few in there.

Good Luck.

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DID YOU MEAN THE GIRLS ARE SITTING ON THERE BEADS OR BEDS ????